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Category: Ideas, Creativity 7 comments 9 Mar 2006 @ 15:56 by judih : silviathe work is very lyrical to play with the english would be to re-write, to change the flow...ah and such a flow. (just take out one of the 'r's in stir) beautiful piece 9 Mar 2006 @ 16:10 by jstarrs : It's lovely like that... ..I wondered about putting a coma after lonely. 9 Mar 2006 @ 16:15 by judih : hi jeff yes! good. a comma after lonely offers a wonderful pause, and a dive into the next expression good call - you've made me hear it more clearly 9 Mar 2006 @ 17:50 by jstarrs : Oh! I heard it humbly & without thinking: wanting to pause, take breath between that fleeting flow which, anyway, might just be a series of static moments pearled together? I'm happy it rang a bell for you....;0) 9 Mar 2006 @ 19:05 by silviamar : Judih and Jeff, my fellow poets, thank you for your insights :-). I've corrected the word 'stir' and also have added the coma after lonely. I agree that it gives a great pause, an opportunity to take a short breath to continue flowing with the life! 12 Mar 2006 @ 00:25 by vibrani : Silvia I like this poem, too. Life is a poem :-) ********* Thank you Vibrani. I completely agree that life is a poem :-) 5 Apr 2006 @ 13:58 by Elena @156.35.192.4 : ¡precioso! He leído todos los poemas en español que has puesto aquí y me encantan!. Mientras leía éste me sentía muy relajada, fluyendo con la vida y con mi yo interior. No sé a qué te dedicas pero desde luego la poesía es lo tuyo, Silvia. ******* Hola Elena. Gracias por tu comentario. Vivo de la quimica, soy investigadora en la universidad de Oviedo, pero me gusta escribir poesia desde que era muy pequeña. Me alegro mucho que te gusten mis poemas! Other entries in Ideas, Creativity 23 Sep 2010 @ 18:13: fbi hacks my NEWCIV Site. 22 Sep 2010 @ 02:15: Who Wins? 21 Sep 2010 @ 23:48: Our StressOut Program for Suicide Prevention with Mindfulness 20 Sep 2010 @ 21:24: Quote for today... 16 Sep 2010 @ 19:00: From "Max Sandor's Tales to his grandson" 11 Jul 2010 @ 14:31: Germany, Uruquay, and Applied Quantum Theory 9 Jul 2010 @ 11:07: The Purpose 7 Jul 2010 @ 01:06: The Bicycle Paradigm 21 Jun 2010 @ 23:38: Summer Solstice 2010 - Sunset 4 Jun 2010 @ 21:06: Time to Shine. . .
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